creates a much deeper connection and brings readers closer you, or the main character. it creates empathy and invests the reader.
this allows the reader to feel what the character is feeling. surprise and the sense of urgency, the fear.
use the 5 senses and rewrite sentences using show not tell
5 senses- taste, hear, smell, feel, see
The boy was sad- Sadness and despair washed over him as his eyes became glazed and two single tears streamed down his face. The tears, more constant now, streamed down, leaving dewy streaks painted across his miserable expression. Muffled noises and sniffles barely escape his mouth as the despair he is feeling has driven him into silence.
The dog wanted to go for a walk- My old dog Johnny stumbled to his feet, barely holding himself up. I could tell by his uneven, wheezy breathing that he was eager to leave the comforts of his bed and embark on an adventure into nearby forest, where the woody smells would invigorate his partially impaired senses. He was on his last leg of life, literally
When they embraced she could tell he had been smoking and was scared- The pungent, suffocating stench filled her lungs and closed up her airways as she embraced Jerry. He was not the same caring person she fell involve with, what has happened ? Fear and uncertainty fogs up her mind as she is trapped in the strong embrace, unable to escape.
The temperature fell and the ice reflected the sun- The last light of day retreats behind the snow covered mountains, in attempt to escape the approaching cold weather. The local peasants wrap up in their winter garments to try block out the bone chilling temperatures. As words are exchanged, the phrases are painted in the sky as frosty clouds.